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RE:People can enjoy more time for leisure activities in the future or not

trevor | 2013.01.04 03:13 | 조회 4076

Some people may argue that people in two decades will not be able to enjoy their leisure time more than the present. However, I would say that people could spend more time on their own activities rather than working in the future. This is because the development of technology would be useful in terms of time-efficiency, and because demographic transformation could change the life styles of the entire population.

 

To begin with, the progress of science would help people utilize their time more efficiently. To be specific, the development of technology could lead to innovations of people’s lives by producing a number of new devices. For instance, smart house would be prevalent in the future, which indicates that people can handle all of their appliances, electronic equipment wherever they are, and that central control system regulates energy usages of the house. Unmanned vehicle would be produced in the future, which implies that people do not need to spend their time on driving. Including aforementioned technologies, a lot of innovation would be applied to people’s lives. This could make people possible to reduce their time to be spent on extra work. It means that they would have more time to do what they really want.

 

On top of that, the transformation of population composition will lead to change in people’s tendency of spending hours. So to speak, there would be rise in aging people worldwide in twenty years later. Generally, elderly people spend more time on their leisure activities rather than work. As population of old people increases, the life styles of the whole population would face changes accordingly. Statistics recently released by Korea Tourism Organization showed that the number of older people traveling to other countries in Korea has steadily increased over the decade. The statistics estimated that the main factor is due to the demographic change in Korea. It also predicted that a larger number of aging people would take trips overseas in the future. Consequently, change in population composition means that there would be more population enjoying their leisure time.

 

To sum up, people in the future could spend more time on leisure activities due to the development of technology as well as population transformation. In this regard, I strongly believe that it is realizable for people in two decades to spend more time on their leisure activities.



Some people may argue that people two decades into the future, will not be able to enjoy their leisure time more than at present. However, I would say that people will be able to spend more time on their own activities rather than working, in the future. This is because the development of technology will become more useful in terms of time-efficiency, and because  the demographic transformation will change the life styles of the entire population.

 

To begin with, the progress of science will help people utilize their time more efficiently. To be specific, the development of technology and new innovative devices will lead to a change in people's lives. For instance, the smart house would be prevalent in the future, which will allow people to handle all of their appliances, and electronic equipment wherever they are, and a central control system will regulate energy usages of the house. Unmanned vehicles would be produced in the future, which implies that people will not need to spend their time driving. Including the aforementioned technology, a lot of innovation would be applied to people’s life styles. This will make people possibly reduce the time spent on extra work. It means that they will have more time to do what they really want.

 

On top of that, the transformation of the population composition will lead to change in how people spend their time. So to speak, there will be a rise in the average age worldwide in twenty years. Generally, elderly people spend more time on their leisure activities than work. As the population of old people increases, the life styles of the whole population will face changes accordingly. Statistics recently released by The Korean Tourism Organization showed that the number of older people  in Korea, traveling to other countries has steadily increased over the decade. The statistics estimated that the main factor is due to the demographic change in Korea. It also predicted that a larger number of elderly people would take trips overseas in the future. Consequently, the change in the population composition means that there will be more of the population enjoying their leisure time.

 

To sum up, people in the future will spend more time on leisure activities due to the development of technology as well as a population transformation. In this regard, I strongly believe that it is a reality that  people in two decades time, will spend more time on their leisure activities.


Good work.  You are making predictions, so it is better to use 'will'    'Could & would' talk about possible or imaginary situations, whereas your are giving your opinion of the future. I will send the mp3 on Saturday, as I have a cold and my voice does not sound good. My apologies.


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